​大学英语四级作文范文及点评:食品安全

大学英语四级作文范文及点评:食品安全

题目：

食品安全

Food Safety

要求：

1 食品安全问题令人担忧。

2 对此，你有什么看法?

参考范文:

Currently, many problem concerning the afety of food have popped up. A for me, I believe at leat three factor account for thi iue.

Firt, I oberve that profit drive many food producer to commit illegal thing. They aim to gain more money at the expene of conumer health. Second, the overue of agricultural peticide ha reulted in the degradation of food quality. The exceive peticide bear enormou health hazard for people. Furthermore, ome food producer inject hormone into dometic animal o a to make them grow more quickly and thu they can turn in more profit. A a reult, people health ha been eriouly diturbed.

All in all, food afety i uch a great concern, and we all hould do etablih law and implement them effectively to avoid producing toxic food.

点评：

首句直接点题，词组pop up指弹起，这里指食品安全突然间成了一大社会问题。

文章第二部分从蔬菜生产商、水果滥用农药及激素方面阐释了食品安全问题的根源。Oberve除了有观察之意，还可以表示某人的观点;动词commit后面通常接违法或伤害性的事情，如commit a crime, commit illegal thing, commit uicide等等。以消费者的健康为代价除了使用at the expene of 还可以使用at the cot of 或者ignoring。另外，在表达同一意思或相近意思时，此文避免了一词多用，而是采用不同的单词或词组，如劣质食品使用了problem concerning the afety of food, the degradation of food quality和toxic food。