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英语大赛获奖作文范文

英语大赛获奖作文范文

本期点评专家：

赵秀凤，中国石油大学外国语学院教授、博士，全国英语创新大赛顾问委员会副主任，第十届、第十—届全国创新英语大赛评委。

参赛佳作

姓名：张雅婷

学校：淄博市实验中学

成绩：96

A letter to my Mom

Dear Mom,

I´m writing thi letter, filled with guilt andanxiety. But I till have to tell you: I´ve run awayfrom home with my boyfriend-Tony. In fact, weclicked traightaway at firt ight. Ilove the tattooon hi body which ha a variety of pattem. Ofcoure, he ha a few girlfriend and we fell outa cmlple oftime about tbi. Thing are gettingbetter thee day, becaue I wa pregnant andhe wore that he would be loyal to me only incethen.

By the way, Tony i lightly older than me(48-year-old man , not too old in the preent o-ciety, righf？). However, we have no money atpreent, o we intend to move to a deert ilandand build a coy cabin in wbich we can leadour own jolly life for the ret of our live. Afterwe have gotten ued to our new life, we plan togrow marijuana to earn money for bi AIDS treat-ment. I pray he can get well oon, Amen!

I hope youjut haven´t fainted till now,Mom. Then you can turn the letter over.

Wbat you have jut read i not tnie. Pleaeforgive me for uing uch an aburd way to let youImow there are many thing in the world which arefar wore than I get grade L111 le than A or at-tending a leep over. I´m till in the bloom of yo-uth and I´m full of energy .I bave paion for dan-cing, port, etc. I´ve yeamed for chooing myown extracurricular activitie for long. However,I can hardly breathe under your tough retriction.And it doen´t make ene to even forbid mebeing in a chool play. An excellent girl do-en´t jut mean good grade. In addition tothi , ucce i not alway about control, it´alo about letting go. Leave me more freepace and I´ll do better, I promie.

Your truly,

Your daughter

May 31th, 2011

专家点评；

这封信开头，作者给妈妈开了一个玩笑，说了一个荒谬而又有趣的故事，吸引读者眼球，激发读者兴趣。借这个故事，作者表示自己是个乖巧的女儿，但是渴望能抛开束缚、获得自由，从而表达了自己对“虎妈”式教育的看法。文章结构新颖，富有创意；思路清晰，语句灵活，说服力强。不足之处是个别语句之间的逻辑不够清晰，存在连接词缺失、使用不当的现象。

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